PREPARED ESSAY SUBMISSIONS
TRUSTING THE PROCESS: CONTENTMENT THROUGH ADVERSITY
JUDGES FEEDBACK:
JUDGE 1: “An *EXCELLENT* application of the theme, fully drawn out and painted. The imagery was so clear. This essay was written with a true gift for writing.”
JUDGE 2: “Excellent essay! You write a compelling narrative and explain your examples well. The only recommendation I have is to write an even clearer thesis statement that consolidates all aspects of the theme (you can do this by indicating the ease of control you learn, as you write in your written statement).”
JUDGE 3: “Amazing. Your words drew me as the reader in from the very beginning, and you used the experience of your grandmother's passing to illustrate how you and your family embodied the essence of tawakkul-- which captures the theme perfectly, and makes the connection clear while still capturing your raw and genuine voice throughout. The examples and references used throughout also further defined what having tawakkul on Allah can mean, which you juxtaposed very nicely with your own perception and way of dealing with your grandmother's death. Beautifully written!”
The Honor of Humility: Finding Dignity in Challenging Pride
JUDGES FEEDBACK:
JUDGE 1: “This was a great piece -- I loved how emotions were able to "show" the theme- the organization was great.”
JUDGE 2: “This essay was extremely informative and very fact-oriented. You spoke very well on the situation in Syria. Overall, it was well-written.”
The Valor of Mercy: Summoning The Strength of Compassion
JUDGES FEEDBACK:
JUDGE 1: “Great work! This was perhaps the most interesting application of the theme I've read so far. You are a good writer who explained complex mathematical motifs with simplicity. In the future, try to use varied word choice so that you can further amplify your work. Keep it up!
JUDGE 2: “An extremely creative and fresh take on the theme and its application. The voice and tone come through this essay as passionate. The sources were a beautiful addition to the piece and all in all, the essay was very well written. Gripping from beginning to end. “
JUDGE 3: “An absolutely stunning piece. I am overwhelmed with how beautiful this essay and how entirely unique the analogy is. The voice of the author is clearly, concisely, and passionately presented & I cannot gloat about it enough. My favorite piece by far!”